“… I only know you
as blonde.” “No I was this
colour… four years ago.”
Reddish – [shrug] – Eyes fixed on black
jeans her arse fits so well
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Writing and Enjoying Haiku #6 new ways, another great prompt from Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Dr Feelgood –
I like this tanka, sounds experimental, but full of hidden love and sexuality.Great!
Thanks, Chèvrefeuille. A bit influenced by senryu in the book I’m reading at the moment, plus some of Jen’s recent experiments 🙂
You’re welcome
Is this a match made in heaven? Maybe not 🙂
Well, there are 3 people in this scene – 2 women talking about hair colour, and a man who’s fairly disinterested in the conversation…
It has a erotic quality , I like the experimental work ! It’s awesome !
Thanks, Milan – learn the rules, break the rules, right? 🙂
Yeah ! Learn and break , that’s how we grow !!
Yowza!
I like 🙂
The line breaks give it an edginess that adds to the eroticism 🙂
Well, this was a bit of a nod to your recent ‘dramatic haiku’, really. Not as good as yours, though 🙂
Aw, shucks … 😉
You sell yourself short though. 🙂