over bluebells
a certain kind of loneliness
a robin stands still
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Universal Jane #15 birdcage, another great prompt from Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, and one that includes a wonderful essay by Jane Reichhold about how to write haiku. Having forgotten most of what I used to know about writing haiku it was fascinating to re-read Jane’s tips 🙂
All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s the Young Marble Giants –
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You’ve really captured the moment in this haiku – I love the loneliness over bluebells – where ‘blue’ adds to the atmosphere – and that still robin!
Thanks, Kim. It was a lovely spring day in the woods and this was the scene – I thought “that looks like a haiku” 🙂
🙂
Excellent haiku Blake. Could have been written by one of the classic haiku poets.
Thanks, Chèvrefeuille – that’s an amazing compliment, really. I’m hoping to get back into regular haiku writing in the summer – because you soon lose the knack of noticing those ‘haiku moments’, and I miss that.
Hope to see you more at cdhk
Btw Chèvrefeuille I seem to have trouble leaving comments at CDHK now, e.g. I commented on “Time Travel, Ancient Japanese Poetry To Inspire You #1 little I should grieve” but I’m not sure if I’m signing into WordPress properly and the comment just vanishes…
Do you know if I sign in as sue-blake.com? Or else what is the proper format? 😦
I will look at it.