night clouds, parting
waves and moonlight mingle some
cracked shells
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #887 Returning home: between the waves, a clam, another great prompt from Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.
And, to finish, here’s Janis Joplin –
Janis!!! Yay!!!
I’m struck by how masterfully you use the line breaks – making the reader slow down and digest your haiku. Layered, textured … deceptively simple. How much you’ve grown since your first haiku!
[Smiling]
Yes, I thought I’d ease the blog into semi-retirement mode for a while with a send off from Janis – how funky she was here!
I think reading the Walt Whitman poem you linked to at BIOLI helped with the line breaks here – for me “mingle some” sounds like American phrasing and here it can either stand on its own or lead into line 3. So, thanks for that 🙂
And yes, what a long strange trip it’s been since you first tricked me into trying to wrangle those 17 syllables 😉
Tricked? Oh, surely that wasn’t the case … just … clever maneuvering, perhaps? LOL!
But yes, “mingle some” is very American and Walty. 🙂
Will miss seeing you around … [sniffle!]
Y’all come back now, y’hear? Really, you’re one of my favorite poets.
[hug]
Smooth pace… I really like the poetic images… Nice one, dear Sue.
Sending love and best wishes for your upcoming week. Aquileana ☀️🔆