blue, curling
smoke round a graveyard pine –
a squirrel I startle
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Haiku Writing Techniques #24 movement (undou), another great prompt from Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.
And, to finish, here’s Elvis –
🙂 I think you captured the movement technique perfectly.
Oh that’s good – it can be a bit tricky when you feel you ought to work a particular technique into a haiku, I find. Sometimes I get so focused on the technique it’s hard to then bring the right balance into the haiku..
Thanks, Georgia.
I agree with you Blake … one of the problems with writing to a prompt especially a prompt that’s stressing a particular form or technique .. but you pulled it off nicely.
the movement drew me into the moment.
In that case, the haiku worked as intended/hoped. Thanks, Janice 🙂
Well done Blake … This movement in your haiku is really great.
Thanks, Chèvrefeuille – also for another challenging prompt, helping everyone stretch our ‘haiku muscles’ 🙂
This is brilliant — both the movement, and a surprising image you’ve captured!
[bowing]
When I walk by our little church I almost always bump into a squirrel or two among the graves – they’re rather a morbid breed of rodent, I find 🙂
This smoky-tailed fellow deserved a few lines, I thought. So, I’m glad the movement and surprise both worked.