blue, curling

smoke round a graveyard pine –

a squirrel I startle


This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Haiku Writing Techniques #24 movement (undou), another great prompt from Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.

And, to finish, here’s Elvis –

9 thoughts on “Blue

    • Oh that’s good – it can be a bit tricky when you feel you ought to work a particular technique into a haiku, I find. Sometimes I get so focused on the technique it’s hard to then bring the right balance into the haiku..

      Thanks, Georgia.

      • I agree with you Blake … one of the problems with writing to a prompt especially a prompt that’s stressing a particular form or technique .. but you pulled it off nicely.

    • When I walk by our little church I almost always bump into a squirrel or two among the graves – they’re rather a morbid breed of rodent, I find 🙂

      This smoky-tailed fellow deserved a few lines, I thought. So, I’m glad the movement and surprise both worked.

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