under amber
lights the smell of pine needles
dropped this December
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #870 prologue: a door of grass; spring departing; how glorious, another great prompt from Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Gram Parsons & Emmylou Harris –
I especially like the break under amber / lights — it adds a layer of meaning to the line and works very well. 🙂
For some reason I’m particularly interested in line breaks at the moment. Don’t you find that, every so often, a certain aspect of haiku is what you feel like focusing on..? Odd! 😉
Thanks, Jen.
I know exactly what you mean …. and your line breaks have been quite interesting as of late. Your work is paying off! 🙂
Very welcome 🙂
Line breaks can be great while used in haiku …. and in a way it can make the haiku stronger, but I think that line breaks can make it harder for the reader to understand the scene, or giving an image to their scene. Just my humble opinion. A very nice haiku Blake.
Oh definitely. There’s always that balance or conflict between simplicity/directness and surprise/mystery when you start writing a haiku, isn’t there? And if it goes wrong the haiku turns either too bland or too difficult – but the experimenting is part of the journey, right 😉
Yes that’s right. Haiku has a lot of possibilities and i like experimenting with the scenes in haiku …