Under Amber

 

under amber

lights the smell of pine needles

dropped this December

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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #870 prologue: a door of grass; spring departing; how glorious, another great prompt from Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Gram Parsons & Emmylou Harris –
 

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6 thoughts on “Under Amber

    • For some reason I’m particularly interested in line breaks at the moment. Don’t you find that, every so often, a certain aspect of haiku is what you feel like focusing on..? Odd! 😉

      Thanks, Jen.

      • I know exactly what you mean …. and your line breaks have been quite interesting as of late. Your work is paying off! 🙂

        Very welcome 🙂

  1. Line breaks can be great while used in haiku …. and in a way it can make the haiku stronger, but I think that line breaks can make it harder for the reader to understand the scene, or giving an image to their scene. Just my humble opinion. A very nice haiku Blake.

    • Oh definitely. There’s always that balance or conflict between simplicity/directness and surprise/mystery when you start writing a haiku, isn’t there? And if it goes wrong the haiku turns either too bland or too difficult – but the experimenting is part of the journey, right 😉

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