Steamy Sun


steamy sun

in mysterious blue

it dips, a goldfish


This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #777 kingyo (goldfish), a great prompt from Paloma, hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Roy Orbison –

4 thoughts on “Steamy Sun

  1. Wow — the phrasing is perfect — and as mysterious as the Blue itself. I really like this, Blake 🙂

    And — you added Roy! [Sigh…!]

    • This is my favourite by Roy – his best songs all seem to have a mystery at their heart, it seems to me. Obviously that phenomenal voice plays its part..

      With a ‘plainer’ haiku there’s a lot of weight on getting the phrasing just right, isn’t there? So I’m glad you thought this worked. Thanks Jen 🙂

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