Distant

 

distant summer grasses

swaying silver mauve green

morning’s music

 

it wears the vast blue

that wears the summer morning –

a gliding gull

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These poems were written in response to Carpe Diem #767 natsuake (summer morning), another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s The Lovin’ Spoonful (with classic 60s sideburns!) –
 

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4 thoughts on “Distant

  1. Wow, Blake –! I There’s an interesting rhythm to the second line in the first haiku. [And — great use of onomatopoeia throughout!] 😉

    I agree with Jennifer: the image in second haiku is perfect. 🙂

    • Thanks, Jen. I thought about a comma or “and” but the breezes didn’t have punctuation, so… 🙂

      As for the second haiku, it only fell into place after I posted an earlier version, looked at it, thought “hmmpf!” and clicked Edit 😉

      • Much better without the punctuation , I agree 🙂
        And – I’m glad you and your muse came to agreement – eventually! A great result.

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