in her new robe
the spring rain
unfolding
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #744 a river breeze, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Fairport Convention –
Nicely done! Love the imagery.
Thanks, Oliana. This is one of the few haiku I’ve written where the imagery and lines arrived “as is” 🙂
Beautifully written, Blake – This has a great classical feel too!
Well, I’m all for breaking the classical rules if it lets us add an extra dimension to a haiku, but I still think you need to know how to apply the rules in the first place – otherwise you’re not actually breaking rules you’re just bumbling about, tripping over 17 syllables like a drunk tripping over the pub steps!
Thanks, dove 🙂
Quite welcome!
You’ve done well — seventeen syllables were not needed here! 🙂
(And we don’t want you to sprain an ankle on the pub steps.) 😉
I think that was Philip Marlowe influenced lit crit – perhaps a first! 😉
Perhaps you’re right! 😀
Seems unlikely but, hey, let’s go with that theory – just for the novelty value 😉
It works for me! 😉
I like freestyle haiku. There is a lot of room for innovation in haiku.
Beautifully done … like this image very much.
Thanks, Georgia. I’m glad you enjoyed it – a very rare example of me coming by a haiku without endless umm-ing an ah-ing 🙂
That’s always a special satisfaction! The poem came easily and nicely written too.