A Pale Blue Vein

 

a pale blue vein

the slow rustle inside… leaves

in the sky

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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #742 under the trees (an example of the karumi-style), another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s The Doors –
 

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4 thoughts on “A Pale Blue Vein

  1. Oh! How did I miss this, Blake!? Wow. After reading this backwards, forwards, mulling the imagery … I’m quite speechless here. Love that rebellious spirit — using the ellipsis to create some mystery!

    • Thanks, Jen! I must admit I quite like how this fell together – it reads so plainly that it’s easy to miss the meanings, but they’re there 🙂

      But yes, I seem to be a fairly poor traditionalist, generally speaking 😉

      • Definitely several layers here — and I love the non-traditional way it fell together! Very good — very good! 😀

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