winter lies still
behind the blossoms, whistling
a wren’s song
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Little Creatures #20, “Wren”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Tom Waits –
This is another one that takes on extra layers as you flip the first/third lines. It seems to shift from hopeful to ominous – and back – as the seasons change – which leading right into the realm of (subtle) metaphor. **Very** nicely done! 🙂
And — great music!
I definitely seem to be in the midst of a blossom phase at the moment lol. I hadn’t really paid so much attention to the 1 to 3 switch here, but you’re absolutely right, of course. So thanks for pointing it out, Jen!
Yes, you can’t beat those subtle metaphors 🙂
🙂
Lovely haiku!
Thanks, Sarah, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
You knew hat you were doing there, composing it classical style with that ‘moment,’ rhat soöitary arrival o Spring in the sound – for me, thus leaving plenty of room for the reader’s imagination. Nicely done. You craft well.
Thanks, Hamish. I must admit it’s not often that there’s a classical style to my haiku, so I’m glad you liked this as I have been working a bit at the ‘crafting’ 🙂
Bravo! this is a great haiku .. you’re really becoming a master of the are! Well done indeed!
Thanks, Georgia! But… a master? I only know of four haiku masters and they’re very, very good 🙂
Well … I must agree they ARE THE MASTERS … but that doesn’t keep anyone from becoming a master. This was a real gem … and shows signs of mastering the genre. 🙂
I “did” a wren singing and blossoms too – a case of great minds obviously!
Well, I’m sure yours is the work of a great mind, at least – mine was guesswork 🙂
Aw, that’s so not true, we were both being brilliant!
Ok, you got me – I admit it 😉