winter lies still
behind the blossoms, whistling
a wren’s song
###
This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Little Creatures #20, “Wren”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Tom Waits –
IN MEMORY EVERYTHING SEEMS TO HAPPEN TO MUSIC -Tennessee Williams
Musings on poetry, language, perception, numbers, food, and anything else that slips through the cracks.
Scout's 20th Century Flash
the life and work of an sf author and his independent publishing company
Paloma's Pen
Poetry and Haiku - Looking to make the ordinary more than mundane.
Saving the world, one book sale at a time.
Japanese Lyrics, Poetry and Manga
a book review blog
A great WordPress.com site
A celebration of language and the written word (with a little art on the side).
Poetry and fiction by a physicist from the dark side
Stories, poems and thoughts about things I find interesting!
Learn Haiku Through Cartoons
"We're all out there, somewhere, waiting to happen."
This is another one that takes on extra layers as you flip the first/third lines. It seems to shift from hopeful to ominous – and back – as the seasons change – which leading right into the realm of (subtle) metaphor. **Very** nicely done! 🙂
And — great music!
I definitely seem to be in the midst of a blossom phase at the moment lol. I hadn’t really paid so much attention to the 1 to 3 switch here, but you’re absolutely right, of course. So thanks for pointing it out, Jen!
Yes, you can’t beat those subtle metaphors 🙂
🙂
Lovely haiku!
Thanks, Sarah, I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
You knew hat you were doing there, composing it classical style with that ‘moment,’ rhat soöitary arrival o Spring in the sound – for me, thus leaving plenty of room for the reader’s imagination. Nicely done. You craft well.
Thanks, Hamish. I must admit it’s not often that there’s a classical style to my haiku, so I’m glad you liked this as I have been working a bit at the ‘crafting’ 🙂
Bravo! this is a great haiku .. you’re really becoming a master of the are! Well done indeed!
Thanks, Georgia! But… a master? I only know of four haiku masters and they’re very, very good 🙂
Well … I must agree they ARE THE MASTERS … but that doesn’t keep anyone from becoming a master. This was a real gem … and shows signs of mastering the genre. 🙂
I “did” a wren singing and blossoms too – a case of great minds obviously!
Well, I’m sure yours is the work of a great mind, at least – mine was guesswork 🙂
Aw, that’s so not true, we were both being brilliant!
Ok, you got me – I admit it 😉