Winter Lies Still

 

winter lies still

behind the blossoms, whistling

a wren’s song

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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Little Creatures #20, “Wren”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Tom Waits –
 

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14 thoughts on “Winter Lies Still

  1. This is another one that takes on extra layers as you flip the first/third lines. It seems to shift from hopeful to ominous – and back – as the seasons change – which leading right into the realm of (subtle) metaphor. **Very** nicely done! 🙂

    And — great music!

    • I definitely seem to be in the midst of a blossom phase at the moment lol. I hadn’t really paid so much attention to the 1 to 3 switch here, but you’re absolutely right, of course. So thanks for pointing it out, Jen!

      Yes, you can’t beat those subtle metaphors 🙂

  2. You knew hat you were doing there, composing it classical style with that ‘moment,’ rhat soöitary arrival o Spring in the sound – for me, thus leaving plenty of room for the reader’s imagination. Nicely done. You craft well.

    • Thanks, Hamish. I must admit it’s not often that there’s a classical style to my haiku, so I’m glad you liked this as I have been working a bit at the ‘crafting’ 🙂

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