pins of lightning

burst the midnight sky

the clouds feel warm as I wear them


This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Special #138: Santoka Taneda’s “Soaking Wet”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Leonard Cohen –

7 thoughts on “Pins

  1. Wow — this is a very trippy haiku-vision — and I love it! You’re the master of surprising imagery, Blake. To think of the night sky as a bursting balloon? NICE 😀

    And really, people don’t ooh-and-ahh about this song enough. What a treat to see him have such fun with the crowd at the end 😉

    • What an amazing lyric this song has, from start to finish! “I said to Hank Williams how lonely does it get. Hank Williams hasn’t answered yet but I hear him coughing, all night long…” Round of applause for Leonard – and a great performance from him, too.

      Oh the sky burst because of the word “cloudburst” and because of some baransu from the idea of pins – glad it turned out a bit trippy 🙂

      Thanks, Jen!

      • This is another one that needs several reads, you know? And now that you mention it, yes, I can see how you’ve used baransu here. 🙂

        … and wasn’t it funny to hear one of the backup singers laugh a bit????

      • True, Leonard’s a funny guy. He’s always had the gift of a comedian’s delivery when he chooses – his intonation of the “golden voice” line on record is comedy gold 🙂

      • Believe it or not, I’d only heard his studio recordings, for the most part, so this live recording was refreshing and *quite* the eye opener. And a much-needed laugh, that’s for sure!

  2. The storm this haiku relates to remains my all-time favourite thunderstorm – it was midnight and I was on my way home, passing through our city centre, which has lots of buildings with glass façades. So each time the lightning flashed the whole place became dazzling in the dark! I’m glad you enjoyed it too, dear Aquileana 🙂

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