Trains Howl


trains howl – think of wolves –

so hunch up in the chair              alone,

with jazz of the moon


This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Sparkling Stars #19, James A. Emanuel (1921-2013) “jazz-haiku”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here are Miles Davis, John Coltrane et al  –

10 thoughts on “Trains Howl

  1. Oh, this is great, Blake —- You’ve captured that jazz syncopation — a rush at the beginning and a delightfully dramatic pause before ——- alone —. There’s just enough formatting that this WORKS without being overdone. And perhaps this is goofy — but — it has a great “noir” feel to it too. I can see the lone wolf detective hunched in his chair in a curl of smoke — a glass of bourbon in his hand.


    • Oh I hadn’t been thinking of film noir, but now you mention it I can see him too 🙂

      Thanks, Jen. I really wasn’t sure how to go about this when I looked at the prompt haiku but I found this really interesting. We were just talking about experimenting and I can certainly see how these ideas can be useful to keep in mind – a completely different texture.

    • Thanks, Chèvrefeuille. I must admit I had no idea how to approach the prompt when I read James A. Emanuel’s poems, which are unlike any other haiku I’ve read. But as I worked on it I could see that his style opens up all sorts of possibilities.

      So, thanks for introducing him at CDHK 🙂

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