bathers dive in

their laughter in a bright pool

the sunlight splashes


This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #670, Bathing, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, which gave Cézanne’s painting “Les Grandes Baigneuses” as our inspiration. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s the 13th Floor Elevators, with Splash 1 –

11 thoughts on “Bathers

  1. I like how you’ve run everything through the poetic mixer — diving into their laughter, the sunlight itself doing the splashing. Taking the frog pond amplifying it! 🙂

    Great song too. 13th floor used to be a prompt at WP. You’ll have to ask Georgia about it some day. 🙂

    • Exactly. Once I saw the bathers diving in the painting it became a chance to play with the old pond a bit 😉

      I hadn’t heard this version of the song before, so that was a cool find. A 13th floor prompt? Was it eerie? Psychedelic?

      • Not necessarily eerie or psychedelic, but very thoughtful. 🙂
        Georgia was part, and I think Bjorn too. (Do you remember him from Carpe Diem?) Small world, this poetry blogging world! 😉

      • Yes, he brought a fresh perspective. A gritty perspective at times. Hoping he returns. His work is showing up on Google plus – but I haven’t had time to read so much of it —

      • True. But it keeps you on your toes; makes you aware if and when you sink into a rut!

        Awesome to see so many personalities too — especially in the more established poets — those voices are strong. Seems the more you write the stronger that voice becomes — which can be both good and bad. But perhaps I’m rambling!

      • Oh yes, you try hard to find a voice then you have to be able to drop it, so as not to end up resorting to a formula.. Fun and games!

        I’ve decided that neither you or I ever ramble, ever! 😛

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