The Red Smear

 

the red smear of a fox

where the tumbling mist shows

me a rabbit

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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Sparkling Stars #16, Shiki’s “lost in the mist”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Roberta Flack with the song from Play Misty for Me (so, there is a link!) –
 

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5 thoughts on “The Red Smear

  1. So much going on here …. wow. And coupled with Roberta Flack it’s really unsettling — like “In Dreams” in “Blue Velvet”. o.O

    But even without the song you’ve provided so many layers again. So much to mull over ….!

    • OK so I posted the following reply to you on the 23rd and only just noticed that I’d done that thing where, instead of replying you post an entirely new, discrete comment… Some genius blogging on my part! I’m just hoping that, since you’re always posting and commenting so much, you didn’t notice my apparent (though not!) lack of courtesy 😦

      Here’s the reply, which now makes no sense to you whatsoever 🙂 –

      No singers do “unsettling” like Roy Orbison! Replying to your comment forced me into a quick listen of Blue Bayou – my favourite of his 🙂

      Roberta Flack’s song is very lovely but it certainly does have undercurrents.. so I can see what you mean.

      And I’m glad you like this one – as you say, it has layers but it reads very simply, which is what I tend to like in haiku. Thanks, Jen 🙂

      • No worries! I understand. Have probably done it too, and not realized it. 😉

        This song by Flack and most “stuff” by Roy Orbison — simple, but easily “nudged” into so many interpretations. Brilliant stuff — but a bit creepy. Probably why it ends up in creepy movies! o.O

        In this haiku, “me a rabbit” is as unsettling as the song 😉

      • Referring back to a comment I just sent you about “Two-line Syndrome” – this was one of those. I had the first two lines, then for the last I thought:
        a rabbit..?
        no rabbits..?
        something about rabbits….??

        It took me a couple of days, literally, to add “me” 🙂

  2. No singers do “unsettling” like Roy Orbison! Replying to your comment forced me into a quick listen of Blue Bayou – my favourite of his 🙂

    Roberta Flack’s song is very lovely but it certainly does have undercurrents.. so I can see what you mean.

    And I’m glad you like this one – as you say, it has layers but it reads very simply, which is what I tend to like in haiku. Thanks, Jen 🙂

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