Gold Hair


gold hair

drawing shapes in the cold breeze

the absent gold leaves drew


This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem “Haiku Writing Techniques” #2, Onomatopoeia, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s David Bowie with Golden Years –

7 thoughts on “Gold Hair

  1. Well now. I had no idea David Bowie had visited Soul Train 🙂

    This is a really interesting haiku, with the gold leaves both present and absent at the same time. And a great sense of movement — despite wondering – at the end of it all – what was there and what wasn’t there – what was real and what wasn’t.

    • Soul Train has all sorts of great performances, as you said – just a pity this was only mimed. Still, a gorgeous song 🙂

      I wrote the haiku after you sent me the poems by Akiko. I especially liked the Friend’s hair/Funeral smoke poem – it does wonderful things with the senses, which seemed to fit the prompt, so I thought I’d try for a similar feel. Hence the absence, I suppose.

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