snowdrops at sunset
in one unending redness
crop of arrows
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #645, Sacred Arrow (Hamayumi or Hama Yumi), another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s an acoustic version of “Broken Arrow” by Neil Young –
IN MEMORY EVERYTHING SEEMS TO HAPPEN TO MUSIC -Tennessee Williams
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Very neat – almost a sinister feel to the snowdrops!
Well, when I thought of arrows I saw a battlefield – bodies stretched out, impaled with arrows – and they looked like the stalks of flowers. Then I brought snowdrops onto the battlefield – so some of the red is the setting sun and some would be blood.
Because I wasn’t really feeling the zenitude of shooting arrows at people.. 😛
Yeah …. arrow-filled bodies don’t really say “zenitude!” to me, either! 😉
But … I’m thinking Akiko could have made an elegant and touching tanka out of it.
True. I wouldn’t be surprised if a few arrows appear in her book, along with some sensual wounding.. 😉
I typed and deleted several responses to “sensual wounding” — but am choosing to walk away with a slightly “knowing” smile on my lips instead. 😉
I must admit I did bait you a little there – I was interested to see whether Jen would answer, quite properly, or the GG might make a guest appearance 😉
It was QUITE a battle, lemme tell ya! Do I? Don’t I? Do I? Don’t I? I chose to be a *good girl* in the end.
Now if you’d launched that comment in the dungeon all bets would be off! 😉
Phew! Cos in these here parts we runs a respectable establishment and we don’t hold with none of that new-fangled immoralising that goes on back east [at this point I spit into the nearest spitoon, which is… hmm… wish I had a spitoon!] 😉
Um… yeah! Y’all SAY “respectable” … but I KNOW what goes on in the back room, pardner! 😉
Well, to quote Mrs Patrick Campbell, the first actress to play “Eliza Doolittle”, in George Bernard Shaw’s Pygmalion: ‘Does it really matter what these affectionate people do — so long as they don’t do it in the streets and frighten the horses!’ 😉
LOL!!! Yup… Works for me! 🙂