the old oak’s roots –
reach from past to future
recall last year ( (c) Björn Rudberg)
here our path looks trampled
though seeds still lie about (Blake)
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This poem is part of Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #67, Björn Rudberg’s “the old oak’s roots”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. In this challenge a lovely haiku by Björn Rudberg of Brudberg’s Writings was our inspiration and we were asked to take his hokku and add two lines in approximately 7/7 syllables, to create a two-person tanka, a tan renga. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.
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I like how you’ve continued the past/future motif into the 7/7 🙂
Here’s hoping the seeds can pierce the trampled soil!
Hopefully 😉 This was written after trying and failing to finish a comment on BIOLI about peace.
So, there are some seeds…
Uh oh. I hope WP wasn’t having hiccups again. o.O
To seeds!
No, the hiccups were all mine..but anyway, to seeds! 🙂
Na zdrowie! 🙂
I love the inclusion of the seeds.. From those the saplings would grow…
Thanks, Bjorn. Your haiku does that cool thing of blending observations of nature with a possible personal interpretation and the only way I could think of continuing that was through the seeds 🙂
Those seeds, magical and mysteriou, will become wish old oaks themselves once … we are just those seeds right now and we still grow to our full potential of knowing and wisdom.
Here’s hoping! personally, I’ll take any wisdom I can get 🙂