Little Stars


little stars

shining words scatter

from a little mouth


talk is so little

under all the little stars

the vaguest comfort


then talk closes

in the distance between us

little stars


little stars

who hears brilliant words

come close



This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #635, Stars, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s a delicate song by Big Star –

10 thoughts on “Little Stars

  1. Those little words that come close . . . but . . . not quite close enough, right? At first I read this as a child talking to the narrator . . . but by the third haiku it seems more like a growing distance between a man and a woman – star-crossed lovers, perhaps? Very nice — much to think about !

    • Yes, there could be some shifting among the characters involved here. The stars prompt made me think of a particular scene, but one of the things I found myself struggling with, haiku-wise, was trying to cram in too much info into the three lines. That’s why I now sometimes link more than one haiku, looking from a slightly different angle each time – it eases the pressure on those three lines 😉

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