bits of rainbows
in the crush and cracks that form –
glaciers’ lives too
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem #625, Glacier, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. And, to finish, here’s Percy Sledge with a cautionary tale about rainbows.
Very nice — a metaphor for life! 🙂
Yes, that’s pretty much why I’m usually keen to avoid metaphors and smilies in haiku – by adding the word “too” at the end here it turns the whole piece into metaphor, much more subtly.
First time I’ve managed to do that – isn’t it nice when you get to cross off another first 😀
Yup!!!! Very nice! And the muses get to give each other knowing looks and a fist-bump or two 😉
very nicely done .. like your imagery!
Thanks, Georgia. With no first-hand glaciers to relate to in Buckinghamshire, I went for fairly classic imagery 🙂
You’ve got a point there … I sometimes wonder what people should describe if they’ve never experience the object of a prompt. Bravo.
The glacier.. very much like us.. wonder when they are all melting if that should be seen a direct threat.
Yep, there’s a mighty judgement coming…
Admit that the waters
Around you have grown
And accept it that soon
You’ll be drenched to the bone
If your time to you
Is worth savin’
…unless the times still have time to get that changin’ done.