tempting waves –
the old boat still needs
a little rest (© Björn Rudberg)
in dry oars a beetle burrows
but shouldn’t stay (Blake)
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This poem was written for Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga Challenge #62, Björn Rudberg’s “tempting waves”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. In this challenge a haiku by Björn Rudberg of Björn Rudberg’s Writings was our inspiration and we were asked to take her hokku and add two lines in approximately 7/7 syllables, to create a two-person tanka, a tan renga. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.
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Nicely written completion Blake.
Oh, this is nice — kind of hopeful, in that you’re advising the beetle to move along — just in case. 🙂
This is probably because of reading Issa at the moment – looking for the critter in the haiku and saying “be careful there, little fella” 🙂
He would do that, too 🙂
He was at one with the critters, it seems — from the larger beetles to fleas and flies and everything in between. 🙂
What an interesting ending … and I agree, probably better it leaves! 🙂