faces flash by
on this wintry road we’re on
and stay strangers
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This poem was written in response to Carpe Diem Special #120, Richard Wright’s “their watching faces,” another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here. Since the haiku has a fairly chilly, isolated feel about it, I thought it’d be nice to finish with music that gives a warm and fuzzy feeling.
Hopefully this isn’t a duplicate comment. Dratted WP!
It’s really interesting how you’ve turned Wright’s “slight recognition” on the Autumn road into “no recognition” on the wintry road. Such a slight switch – with a tremendous result. Nicely done!
And I’m so glad you ended with some Sly 😉
Great memories, there — LOVED Soul Train as a kid. Had a killer intro, too, didn’t it? 😉
Oh I’ve never seen Soul Train – it never made it over here, but it looks fantastic! Allowing Sly to let the song go sprawling like that into such a loose jam… glorious – I’ll have to watch it again now 🙂
And yes, this is probably one of the first times I’ve really tried to stay close to the feel of the original, whereas before I’ve mostly been pleased if I could gather three decent-sounding lines together 😉
Oh, do find some Soul Train on YouTube — you’ll love it!
It really takes a while to get comfortable enough with haiku to start thinking about reflecting tone and style – you’ve come a long way Tadpo 🙂
Tadpo – still love that name! Once I’ve earned it, it’s mine 😀
It IS an awesome name! Has an Issa-like humor to it. 🙂
Excellent… It makes me think of Life as multiple crossroads of juxtaposed paths!. I really like this one, dear sue!. Love. Aquileana 😀
Yes, that’s pretty much what I was thinking of – all the people whizzing by each other… 😛