In This Absence


In this absence

Of a particular pulse

The moonlight drags ghosts


This poem was written for Carpe Diem Special #118, Tomas Tranströmer’s fourth “in time with the moon”, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.

7 thoughts on “In This Absence

  1. The moonlight dragging ghosts — a very eerie but strangely vivid image! So much room for interpretation too, in the pulse’s absence. Hmmmm……

    Very nice 🙂

      • Sometimes those quickly glimpsed impressions make for wonderful writing, in my opinion — perhaps they’re hints from our muses — whispers we ignore, or verses to which we reply, “well, it could be *better*, right?”

      • Yes, I tend to feel a bit uneasy if something arrives too quickly – I look at it and think, well this word could change.. that word could change.. then there are four different versions, suddenly 😛

        So, yes, sometimes better just to rush and say “pfft that’s done!” 😉

      • LOL!

        After days and days of struggling, the “gift” poem seems just entirely too easy. Old habits are hard to break …..

    • Oh I know! When I read your haiku I like the “dragging”, as I said. Then I thought to myself “what did I write for this prompt?” (because I tend to mix up what haiku fits with which prompt), so I checked my post and thought “aah… maybe it rang a bell” 🙂

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