Shallow fountains
Look pink where plucked buds float up –
Little deaths tonight
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This poem was written for Carpe Diem #598, Large Pink (Nadeshiko) or Carnation, one of the Seven Sacred Autumn Flowers, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.
Ooh … very eerie … but every plucked bud, every cut flower, is a little death, isn’t it? Yet still, those floating pink buds make a lovely image ….
This haiku derives from my reading of the techniques that Jane Reichhold talks about – dual meaning and innuendo. Frankly, if I had a dungeon this would be heading in that direction 😉 There’s the eerie reading and then there’s another, depending on how the reader understands the phrase “little death.”
Glad you liked the eerie version 🙂
Oh dear… Sway me unto death, right? How’d I miss that? 😉
Picture me doing a Stephen-Colbert-esque eyebrow shuffle ….!
Oh you just hadn’t realised how far the GG had led me astray, that’s all 😉
Have you been practising the eyebrow shuffle? Cool! You should add a gif on BIOLI 🙂
A gif of my eyebrow shuffle? Oh dear — that’d scare the readers away!
But methinks you were well astray before you meandered into the dungeon … it’s why we get along so well 😉
Hmm I’m pleading the fifth at this point. Admittedly, we don’t have a fifth amendment, but since I’m being accused from the US I’m darn well claiming it! 😛
And I am generous, so I shall grant it. 😉 [Grant it? Yup. Because American justice is nothing if not inconsistent. o.O]
Seriously, though — y’all don’t have an equivalent to the Fifth? That really stinks. 😦
And I just used three emojis. Rats. Well, I haven’t used a smiley yet so here goes: 🙂
That last line is a killer, I love it
Thanks, Shannon – the final word was a late addition and I think it makes all the difference 🙂