Shallow Fountains


Shallow fountains

Look pink where plucked buds float up –

Little deaths tonight


This poem was written for Carpe Diem #598, Large Pink (Nadeshiko) or Carnation, one of the Seven Sacred Autumn Flowers, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.

9 thoughts on “Shallow Fountains

  1. Ooh … very eerie … but every plucked bud, every cut flower, is a little death, isn’t it? Yet still, those floating pink buds make a lovely image ….

    • This haiku derives from my reading of the techniques that Jane Reichhold talks about – dual meaning and innuendo. Frankly, if I had a dungeon this would be heading in that direction 😉 There’s the eerie reading and then there’s another, depending on how the reader understands the phrase “little death.”

      Glad you liked the eerie version 🙂

      • Oh dear… Sway me unto death, right? How’d I miss that? 😉

        Picture me doing a Stephen-Colbert-esque eyebrow shuffle ….!

      • Oh you just hadn’t realised how far the GG had led me astray, that’s all 😉

        Have you been practising the eyebrow shuffle? Cool! You should add a gif on BIOLI 🙂

      • A gif of my eyebrow shuffle? Oh dear — that’d scare the readers away!

        But methinks you were well astray before you meandered into the dungeon … it’s why we get along so well 😉

      • Hmm I’m pleading the fifth at this point. Admittedly, we don’t have a fifth amendment, but since I’m being accused from the US I’m darn well claiming it! 😛

      • And I am generous, so I shall grant it. 😉 [Grant it? Yup. Because American justice is nothing if not inconsistent. o.O]
        Seriously, though — y’all don’t have an equivalent to the Fifth? That really stinks. 😦
        And I just used three emojis. Rats. Well, I haven’t used a smiley yet so here goes: 🙂

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