Drunk dance of goodbyes –
Wind’s applause
Giddy branch
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This poem was written for Carpe Diem “Sparkling Stars” #11, Jack Kerouac, another great prompt hosted by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai. All of the poems in the link-up can be read here.
A great image Blake — it really does look like a drunken dance at times. I think Jack would have appreciated this one — (as do I!)
Although… as I’m reading Jane Reichhold’s very useful ebook I find that “wind’s applause” might be a bit of “personifying.” But hey, the wind can sound like applause… plus I find that one of Basho’s haiku was in the past tense! I was shocked. It’s anarchy 🙂
Hey, like Basho himself said: learn the rules then ignore them. You’ll find all kinds of instances where Basho and Buson and Issa (and, dare I say it, even Shiki?) broke the rules.
And people can say what they want about personifying — they say it’s projecting humankind on nature – but I see it was empathizing and being at one with nature.
So there. 🙂
Great response Blake. Kerouac would be delighted with this haiku in response on his own. In tune with Kerouac … well done.
I’m glad. I’d never read any of Kerouac’s haiku until I saw the prompt, so it was nice to get a different angle on things.
Bravo Blake — a true beat generation American Haiku …. great job!